You get down on the ball real good! But, do you realize you are raising up before every shot? If you can learn to stay down, you will go up a speed quick. This can be learned in ONE DAY! Just MAKE yourself stay down on all shots for one full day. It will become a habit quicker than you think.
I would also suggest you take an extra second or two to figure out just where you want the cue ball to go. Do this BEFORE you get down. A couple of times it looked like you shot before you were really ready.
One other thing, you have to put more "body" into your break shot. You're still almost all arm. It's the one shot where you can move into the shot, like a karate blow.
Okay, that's about it for now. That will be $50 please.