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What would be necessary for you to be silenced?
Dam, I was hoping you were gonna work a sharknado in the story....
Never know?
it could be true.
When drugs are there anything is possible and lots of money.
Good read and pretty good story.
I could see this happening back when I was on the road.
I had a guy once was going to take me to a spot and had plans on knocking me in the head and feeding me to the alligators after we won the cash. I had already decided not to go with this guy because he was just too scary and on drugs and had just got out of prison.
A young kid that was steering me around a little bit named David had a friend that had talked to this guy and had been shared the plan. he told David and David told me.
I then told david that I had already planned on not making the trip with this guy.
About a month later this guy raped a 70 something years old woman and left her tied up. he ended back in prison.
That was a story that could have included me in a real bad way, like dead, but my street smarts kept me safe.
But playing pool on the road I did get myself into about a dozen bad situations anyway.
Nobody got shot or killed but could have and it would have been me.
I guess a person that read what I wrote down could say it wasn't true also. I was there.
This story is possible. Do I think it is true? Maybe.
You never can tell...............unless you were there...............:wink:
it could be true.
When drugs are there anything is possible and lots of money.
Good read and pretty good story.
I could see this happening back when I was on the road.
I had a guy once was going to take me to a spot and had plans on knocking me in the head and feeding me to the alligators after we won the cash. I had already decided not to go with this guy because he was just too scary and on drugs and had just got out of prison.
A young kid that was steering me around a little bit named David had a friend that had talked to this guy and had been shared the plan. he told David and David told me.
I then told david that I had already planned on not making the trip with this guy.
About a month later this guy raped a 70 something years old woman and left her tied up. he ended back in prison.
That was a story that could have included me in a real bad way, like dead, but my street smarts kept me safe.
But playing pool on the road I did get myself into about a dozen bad situations anyway.
Nobody got shot or killed but could have and it would have been me.
I guess a person that read what I wrote down could say it wasn't true also. I was there.
This story is possible. Do I think it is true? Maybe.
You never can tell...............unless you were there...............:wink:
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not bad
A little light on research here and there but overall not terribly poorly written especially considering the writing of most high school students. I thought the hedge fund manager instead of one of the more usual villains was at least a touch of imagination. The author should have been on the scene in the story then he could have added much more detail. I'd give him a c+ or B- for the storyline in creative writing, didn't bother considering the grammar and punctuation.
The forum has largely been taken over by fiction anyway, I think we need more of this type! A little factual fiction and fictional fact is always entertaining.
Hu
A little light on research here and there but overall not terribly poorly written especially considering the writing of most high school students. I thought the hedge fund manager instead of one of the more usual villains was at least a touch of imagination. The author should have been on the scene in the story then he could have added much more detail. I'd give him a c+ or B- for the storyline in creative writing, didn't bother considering the grammar and punctuation.
The forum has largely been taken over by fiction anyway, I think we need more of this type! A little factual fiction and fictional fact is always entertaining.
Hu
Hey Built, do you even believe the drivel that you write here???
The giveaways in your story are too many details, like the ring of coke around Hedges face, looking at Arizona to see if chest is rising and falling, if this shit really went down the scene would be utter chaos, the guy probably wouldn't remember half the details in your story. Fight or flight, it has been ingrained into the most primitive parts of our brains for millions of years. The only thing New York would have been doing was frantically looking for a way out of the situation, not looking to if Arizona's chest is rising and falling, unless of course New York has had done many tours in Delta Force, Rangers, Seals, etc.. or is that the sequel?
The giveaways in your story are too many details, like the ring of coke around Hedges face, looking at Arizona to see if chest is rising and falling, if this shit really went down the scene would be utter chaos, the guy probably wouldn't remember half the details in your story. Fight or flight, it has been ingrained into the most primitive parts of our brains for millions of years. The only thing New York would have been doing was frantically looking for a way out of the situation, not looking to if Arizona's chest is rising and falling, unless of course New York has had done many tours in Delta Force, Rangers, Seals, etc.. or is that the sequel?
No such person at Hard Times. PURE FICTION from start to finish! :thud:
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I told you in your first thread, please put down the keyboard before somebody gets hurt!
And you just wouldn't listen, now look what happen!
That is damn funny.
